Band 9 model answer
As automation and economic shocks threaten livelihoods, some argue that the state should act as an employer of last resort, guaranteeing work to anyone willing to take it. While I sympathise with the goal of eliminating involuntary unemployment, I only partly agree, for such a scheme carries serious practical risks.
There is much to admire in the proposal. Unemployment inflicts not only financial hardship but also a corrosive loss of purpose and dignity, and a guarantee would spare people that fate while channelling idle labour into socially useful work such as elder care, conservation or public infrastructure. By setting a wage floor, it could also strengthen the bargaining power of low-paid workers across the economy, compelling private employers to improve conditions.
Nevertheless, the obstacles are formidable. Designing genuinely productive roles for millions, rather than make-work that demoralises participants, is extraordinarily difficult, and the fiscal cost could prove unsustainable during downturns, precisely when demand for the scheme would peak. There is also a danger that a vast public payroll crowds out private enterprise and entrenches inefficiency, since guaranteed jobs need not justify themselves through results.
On balance, then, I believe the state has a duty to combat unemployment vigorously but should pursue subtler tools than a blanket guarantee. Generous retraining, wage subsidies and targeted public works can deliver much of the benefit while avoiding the bloat and rigidity of an open-ended promise. The aim of full, dignified employment is admirable; an unconditional guarantee is simply not the most prudent means of reaching it.
Examiner’s notes
- Task Response: the 'to what extent' prompt is met with a precise partial-agreement stance ('I only partly agree'), and the conclusion proposes a clear alternative, showing developed critical thinking.
- Coherence and Cohesion: balanced architecture moves from merits to drawbacks via 'Nevertheless, the obstacles are formidable', and 'On balance, then' signals the reasoned final position.
- Lexical Resource: policy-aware phrasing including 'employer of last resort', 'make-work', 'crowds out private enterprise' and 'wage subsidies' shows command of an advanced register.